Little Star

*أنسام* · 11-10-2008, 11:49 AM

hello My friends

.. actually this is a simple thought or you can say a i short story, i wrote it lately

i hope you like it..

Little Star

a little star lost her way to home
she begin to cry and cry ….but no one hear her crying
everybody sleeping !!
tear drop in the blackness night …
it fall at the moon …and wake him up >>
the moon hugged the star and said to her: I'm her..
they shared together some stores .. until the star's father attended..
he thanks the moon and took his daughter to home..
before the little star leave,
she give the moon a flower and a big hug

****************

in life we some times fall down …
at that moment we need
a kind person , to hold our hands…
You Can Be Him!!

best wishes

كليجا للبيع · 11-10-2008, 05:10 PM

she is tha tobic and tha story is verey good

save_us.222 · 11-10-2008, 08:15 PM

good, you've got potentials . just work on your grammer and nevermind anythin' else , 'cuz ur quite good at the whole other stuff . maybe the grammer needs a bit of correcting ; so that it doesn't bring any misleading to the meaning

. good luck

كليجا للبيع · 11-10-2008, 09:06 PM

اقتباس:

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة save_us.222

good, you've got potentials . just work on your grammer and nevermind anythin' else , 'cuz ur quite good at the whole other stuff . maybe the grammer needs a bit of correcting ; so that it doesn't bring any misleading to the meaning

. good luck

yas
just in broblam in grammer

thnx ansam&save_us.222

*أنسام* · 13-10-2008, 09:14 AM

thanks my friends for your words ...

we mistake in our language ,

definitely we will make mistaks in the foreign language...!!!

it's a beginning... and every beginning has error..

i'm happy that you writ your criticism...

اسطورة الحياة · 13-10-2008, 03:14 PM

what you said is so beautifull.......... the moon alwayes has a star near to it,,,,,,,

احساس الدوحة · 13-10-2008, 05:43 PM

I like it

I am waiting for some thing new

good luck

كليجا للبيع · 13-10-2008, 08:08 PM

اقتباس:

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة *أنسام*

thanks my friends for your words ...

we mistake in our language ,

definitely we will make mistaks in the foreign language...!!!

it's a beginning... and every beginning has error..

i'm happy that you writ your criticism...

You well

شهداء الغراااام · 13-10-2008, 08:25 PM

Placed very Resplendent
best Estimableness

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